Please consider Ver. 1.0.1 the final version for the time being. However, please continue to point out errors I may have missed and perhaps another minor fixes patch could be released, but I will not be seeking out these issues proactively.
I'm on it! An don't feel obligated ta go back an make some/any of these suggested changes. More then enough hard works been done on this project as-is!
edit: btw this list has been based on the v1.0.2 patch since that came out. so the comments below are like still applicable.
• Link 02:https://i.imgur.com/9LUhxG7.jpg
- "you" should be changed to "I" else this line doesn't make sensehttps://i.imgur.com/CDGYU3o.jpg
- I still don't understand thishttps://i.imgur.com/yhlajYq.jpg
- "courage" is misspelled
• SIGN 01:https://i.imgur.com/5ZxGaWQ.jpg
- "wasn't" should be changed to "was" or "it's a cheat"https://i.imgur.com/BPvYNSJ.jpg
- who's "acquainted with Chrono Cores"? did she mean "those acquainted with the Chrono Cores holder"?
• SIGN 03:https://i.imgur.com/pWFNjuH.jpg
- this kinda comes off as giberish
• SIGN 04:https://i.imgur.com/HnqqMaX.jpg
- reads like it should be something like "It would be easier for people of the same age to befriend him."https://i.imgur.com/sp6U2MW.jpg
- a better fit might be "...Tokio? Where do you think you're going?"
• SIGN 05:https://i.imgur.com/0f4jpKO.jpg
- sounds alil strange to me.
• SIGN 06:https://i.imgur.com/4DMg4lE.jpg
- where'd the Lambda server symbol come from? its not even used in Link normally as Carmina Gadelica got changed to Sigma.https://i.imgur.com/nz7bSQR.jpg
- think a better fit'd be "Ah... we've returned to our previous location?"
• SIGN 08:https://i.imgur.com/95yslLg.jpg
- wasn't Subaru the one persuading Tsukasa to go along at that point?
• SIGN 09:https://i.imgur.com/voaOGPm.jpg
- Crims fighting against Sora not alongside himhttps://i.imgur.com/OSioJ9x.jpg
- "original location" will never not sound too literal to me
• SIGN 11:https://i.imgur.com/6CLYlOE.jpg
- shouldn't this say "Silver Knights" and not Crimson? cause the Database even lists 'em as the Silver Knights.https://i.imgur.com/5nBlCk0.jpg
- Tokio had just noted the place was empty save for Silver Knight.
• Link 03:https://i.imgur.com/FykTmYM.jpg
- idk this just reads oddly to me.https://i.imgur.com/CNcZyYp.jpg
- same for this.
• .hack// 01:https://i.imgur.com/jdFFC0r.jpg
- umm wha?https://i.imgur.com/yhau4Jz.jpg
- err, isn't he the one with the so-called evidence?
• .hack// 02:https://i.imgur.com/KkQkASf.jpg
- this is alil backwards.
• .hack// 03:https://i.imgur.com/RWAb8iZ.jpg
- monsters were witnesses?https://i.imgur.com/BFUOxU1.jpg
- this feels like it should say something like "I got praised by the brave Kite."
• .hack// 04:https://i.imgur.com/y4e5inD.jpg
- that second line just sounds off.
• .hack// 05:https://i.imgur.com/KqXy87Q.jpg
- coming from her this doesn't seem right at all!https://i.imgur.com/tF9ayXP.jpg
- let him who? if the "let him" is removed this sentence makes much more sensehttps://i.imgur.com/7KPJ3t5.jpg
- feel like the "has" could be replaced with "can"https://i.imgur.com/sLQSARL.jpg
- 4649? is this some pun/wordplay going on?https://i.imgur.com/iyANMCV.jpg
- that "of" shouldn't be therehttps://i.imgur.com/FD2uEVB.jpg
- given how the conversation flows that "I'm" should be a "you're"https://i.imgur.com/v8uCIhA.jpg
- he didn't fight Mia so wha?
• Grand Whalehttps://i.imgur.com/BDF2LzH.jpg
- this oughta be "last Phase" or "Eighth Phase" not "last Eighth Phase"
• .hack// 06:https://i.imgur.com/bM5chrK.jpg
- I'd replace "The" with "Your"https://i.imgur.com/HOkFQ9M.jpg
- not understanding this onehttps://i.imgur.com/F649sNk.jpg
- some serious future tense going on here. I'd change it to "...We'll win this fight and save Orca! We'll save everyone!"https://i.imgur.com/4UdwjjZ.jpg
- Kite just got turned to stone (again) he's not coming to help anyone
• .hack// 07:https://i.imgur.com/xkbigri.jpg
- what is she talking about?https://i.imgur.com/kw57P4I.jpg
- that first one seems like it should be "...You're going to help Kite?"https://i.imgur.com/WeCBI1F.jpg
- is it supposed to be "enemy" or "statue" here? honestly not sure since both could kinda be truehttps://i.imgur.com/DtveqfM.jpg
- suggest replacing "They" with "We've"https://i.imgur.com/65xmwEK.jpg
- spotted "Blackrose" here while other times her name was displayed it read "BlackRose"https://i.imgur.com/Nx0bcpf.jpg
- this sentence is kinda jumbledhttps://i.imgur.com/ND2eRh8.jpg
- whaaaaat? Helba caused nothing!https://i.imgur.com/MUfT1Tf.jpg
- saying "we can do something" is kinda the opposite of the point she's trying to makehttps://i.imgur.com/VWJ4lI5.jpg
- the first picture seems fine but how the conversation flows into the second sentence of picture two is weird.https://i.imgur.com/m0q1i0l.jpg
- it feels like "you know" should instead be "you've decided"
• Grand Whalehttps://i.imgur.com/l0S1J4f.jpg
- they're refering to Kite who hasn't been saved so this he/him stuffs sounds off
• ZERO 03:https://i.imgur.com/Txnfg6c.jpg
- the v in vanished is randomly capitalized!
• Link 04:https://i.imgur.com/eiiR5FU.jpg
- prolly just me but something about this feels off
• Roots 01:https://i.imgur.com/bh1n02o.jpg
- this doesn't seem right. Saika's supposed to be nudging Tokio into saying he'd like to join Shino's guildhttps://i.imgur.com/nR69eVF.jpg
- given the way the conversations going this feels like it should be "Tokio, what's on your mind?"https://i.imgur.com/Q2NjWYh.jpg
- "This is Tokio. He's applied to join the Twilight Brigade."https://i.imgur.com/hUmoRMI.jpg
- the second line really don't sound righthttps://i.imgur.com/6xS7Flj.jpg
- I'd give "I'll somehow become" the boot an changed it to "I managed to become"
• Roots 02:https://i.imgur.com/XlllEyv.jpg
- since he's talking about Shino, I think it should say "she takes" instead of "we take"?https://i.imgur.com/zJvsG4D.jpg
- not a Virus Core?https://i.imgur.com/hgVzjCF.jpg
- "This one and ther others have different colors" might sound more naturalhttps://i.imgur.com/0hiV5hw.jpg
- these two really go together cause he can't say one moment he doesn't know if theres more, then in the next they need to find the rest. also the "become" in the second pic might instead work better as "lead to"
• Roots 03:https://i.imgur.com/N0xITLe.jpg
- really confused by the second sentence herehttps://i.imgur.com/gDwkcqy.jpg
- he'll be touched?
• Roots 04:https://i.imgur.com/NCalttK.jpg
- "on" oughta be "in"https://i.imgur.com/2MHJKtt.jpg
- okay if we're going with "sacred stone" instead of virus core... then shouldn't Tokio be saying sacred stone an not stone monument?https://i.imgur.com/vrhVuJW.jpg
- ...and Haseo should be calling it sacred stone and not tablet
• Grand Whalehttps://i.imgur.com/tJjJKAB.jpg
- just incase we're not set on "stone" instead of virus core
• .hack// 08:https://i.imgur.com/pcpnRUc.jpg
- "I'm not interested Nuke..."?https://i.imgur.com/4BU3GSP.jpg
- think there should maybe be an "if" right before the "I"https://i.imgur.com/7QHxUBC.jpg
- here's an inconsistency with pun labeling. 1-30 have "Round" before each number. 31-60 changes to "Number". 63-70 just shows the number, nothing else before it. 71-100 goes back to saying "Number"https://i.imgur.com/BIN4vwd.jpg
- also, puns 61 & 62 are invisible! ack!https://i.imgur.com/6jYGS7r.jpg
- she'll lick it?https://i.imgur.com/7hXyExa.jpg
- think her "angers subsiding" would be a better fithttps://i.imgur.com/sh6t6oh.jpg
- theres no space between Title & Obtained!
• Roots 05:https://i.imgur.com/hnzgGFC.jpg
- there's an extra "n" in Dol Dona herehttps://i.imgur.com/56Lwduq.jpg
- more sacred stone stuff but this time neithers capitalizedhttps://i.imgur.com/GIWLbbu.jpg
- think these lines need another lookoverhttps://i.imgur.com/CTp1qsB.jpg
- now they are capitalized!
• ZERO 05:https://i.imgur.com/6BAS7Ua.jpg
- believe that "he" should be an "I"
• Roots 06:https://i.imgur.com/xBHmfyY.jpg
- its the brigade that got ambushed not Tawarayahttps://i.imgur.com/L87qcM0.jpg
- think this oughta be "you're" not "we're"https://i.imgur.com/1kRiOKJ.jpg
- since Tokio's the one telling her to be careful I believe the "you" and "I" should switch placeshttps://i.imgur.com/4sVHFkl.jpg
- this is another ? to mehttps://i.imgur.com/0J7wwPC.jpg
- that whole first line is what
• Roots 07:https://i.imgur.com/uZuDwfX.jpg
- since I mentioned in the Database part about the Illusionist/Magician thing well its come back around. the first picture is his original introduction from .hack// 05 and the second is the flashback to it in Roots 07. which is the right term?
• Roots 08:https://i.imgur.com/kO6Lkx2.jpg
- oughta be "her" and not "his" since its Shino's PC thats changed colorshttps://i.imgur.com/qEjDKyr.jpg
- theres gotta be a better way of wording thishttps://i.imgur.com/4r08Tyy.jpg
- who escaped o.o?https://i.imgur.com/zwHUv0p.jpg
- he's telling Tabby to mail Haseo so that "I'll" can be cuthttps://i.imgur.com/422CZCk.jpg
- think this is in reference to the Schicksal barrier failing/fading so maybe it should say "The... the barrier?!"https://i.imgur.com/js4psyK.jpg
- "...Haseo rushed inside." could be more suitable for the first linehttps://i.imgur.com/uLlJdwt.jpg
- Saika's still heartless lol. umm I mean "owners" and "Cores" dun need ta be pluralized here. I think?https://i.imgur.com/i2lJyyl.jpg
- looks like alil typo here where "be" should instead say "we"
• Grand Whale:https://i.imgur.com/ZeCyx6d.jpg
- another lil typo. "he" prolly is meant to be "the"
• Roots 09:https://i.imgur.com/mxy4Asn.jpg
- Tabby was with Tokio at the time so he told her to send the mail in person so the first sentence is offhttps://i.imgur.com/IIX6M1L.jpg
- if theres no reaction why's she sending him there?https://i.imgur.com/UCp3YDX.jpg
- confused as to what the first sentence meanshttps://i.imgur.com/7U59E6f.jpg
- this whole conversation seems backwards unless each "I" is replaced with "you". and in the first pic those two would switch places
• Link 05:https://i.imgur.com/QeD6bP4.jpg
- Labyrinth of Regret? in all other mentions its just called the Final Labyrinthhttps://i.imgur.com/XhjQRcv.jpg
- not understanding thishttps://i.imgur.com/3tuWZFY.jpg
- or thishttps://i.imgur.com/fTqlBPh.jpg
- same as the last twohttps://i.imgur.com/siu2LXw.jpg
- think that "you" oughta be a "me"
• Mac Anuhttps://i.imgur.com/XS3IfsU.jpg
- wouldn't he know he's back in 2020?
• Liminality 01:https://i.imgur.com/bunGVvD.jpg
- the top and bottom lines should swap places maybe?https://i.imgur.com/vQmupPO.jpg
- this "You're" should maybe be a "She's"https://i.imgur.com/j3kokFb.jpg
- doesn't make a whole lotta sense no matter which way I try an interpret ithttps://i.imgur.com/O2OXcqh.jpg
- same with this alsohttps://i.imgur.com/mHn2a02.jpg
- basically it seems they're talking about Minase in a roundabout way that comes off like they're speaking of Alph instead
• LotT 01:https://i.imgur.com/LxHDO5n.jpg
- "later-upa" would sound more accurate than "ago-upa"https://i.imgur.com/Vsa0qGO.jpg
- just like with those titles, a space is missing here
• Another Birth 01:https://i.imgur.com/oTZyjGc.jpg
- Chimney is BlackRose's friend so shouldn't that "his" be a "my"?
• LotT 02:https://i.imgur.com/EtiSnyk.jpg
- "This is four years after Tokio met the .hackers-upa." is my take on thishttps://i.imgur.com/ZvrzaPU.jpg
- what's he on about?https://i.imgur.com/eiOpY0A.jpg
- Delta Wide Grace's Ground became Delta Wide Graceful Earth (ignoring the Sigma since thats messed up across all areas) o.o;https://i.imgur.com/OVlENNa.jpg
- again whats he on about? calling Shugo a nice guy is ooc for Komiyan and this circumstance
• Link 06:https://i.imgur.com/VOUthQB.jpg
- I think "detour" and "step back" should switch places with the otherhttps://i.imgur.com/4F6zFGD.jpg
- not quite following what he's talking abouthttps://i.imgur.com/rg94YFg.jpg
- typo alert! that first "it" should be "is"https://i.imgur.com/VCNv8ii.jpg
- extremely minor but on the "how to fight Orgel LO" message before the battle begins it says "Orgel-LO" while in battle theres no hyphenhttps://i.imgur.com/u1o1xfP.jpg
- shouldn't it be "So we can't afford to lose to you here."?https://i.imgur.com/EGBjJcF.jpg
- idk if this is right or wrong in the flashback to this scene shortly after this episode ends (which I sadly didn't screencap) she says something to the affect of her brother being monitored by them. so if nothing else theres some more disparity between something someone said in the present vs. in a flashbackhttps://i.imgur.com/2LxvukN.jpg
- this could be another case where an "I" should be in place of a "you"
• Grand Whalehttps://i.imgur.com/kJuNTfP.jpg
- dun think her math adds up since theres only 4 chrono cores!
• G.U. 01:https://i.imgur.com/tMMGvIm.jpg
- the first e in Tri-Edge isn't capitalized here!https://i.imgur.com/8ba9Ds5.jpg
- suggest replacing "doesn't" with "didn't"https://i.imgur.com/pV776cI.jpg
- sounds odd to mehttps://i.imgur.com/IuzLaOp.jpg
- think this is in need of a small re-writehttps://i.imgur.com/7HKsvAe.jpg
- I'd understand the "Is she" if he were thinking to himself but thats not the case. should most likely be "Are you" instead
• Grand Whalehttps://i.imgur.com/slHUrmT.jpg
- lower cased edge mania!!
• G.U. 02:https://i.imgur.com/F0zdfpV.jpg
- there's the E in Tri-Edge capitalized then not all in the same scene o.o;https://i.imgur.com/OfQoGin.jpg
- question: is this to be taken as Saika was also eating for reals food at this point?https://i.imgur.com/uStAKS2.jpg
- really thinking this oughta be "That man... how does he know that I'm acquainted with Haseo?"https://i.imgur.com/YqRvGtO.jpg
- did this happen offscreen or is the line supposed to be read more like "But, information about your PC body was leaked." ? can't see why she'd have reason to blame Tokio...https://i.imgur.com/EXdgfVY.jpg
- ...cause as seen here she doesn't seem to know
• AI buster 01:https://i.imgur.com/a37RxnJ.jpg
- "They" maybe ought be "We've"
• Chup Chop Case 01https://i.imgur.com/yj9Bdy9.jpg
- "This period is five years after Tokio met the .hackers-upa." I feel this'd be more fittinghttps://i.imgur.com/7QetIEn.jpg
- hmm think the "hear" should actually be "say"https://i.imgur.com/NTFxbxy.jpg
- this is pretty iffy sounding to me
• LotT 03https://i.imgur.com/AJ68xmy.jpg
- "This is where Tokio met the .hackers four years ago-upa." another one of thesehttps://i.imgur.com/XQpCVKK.jpg
- I get that Zefie's doing her insult thing but whats a painting got to do with Tokio for him to be offended by her trash talk?https://i.imgur.com/XJ6x9qp.jpg
- unless there is actually an event going on "This child is not an event NPC." would sound more fittinghttps://i.imgur.com/28nQVSO.jpg
- Zefie's not there so "is" oughta be "was"https://i.imgur.com/dd6Ng8u.jpg
- seems like there's a word missing there. should go like "I don't know what we should do."
• Chup Chop Case 02https://i.imgur.com/JYNCKoa.jpg
- "This era is five years after you met the .hackers-upa."https://i.imgur.com/uKca09r.jpg
- is she speaking to herself here? if not the "it," needn't be there
• Roots 10https://i.imgur.com/r52fetm.jpg
- we're looking for Antares, not a fire!https://i.imgur.com/iZvK14f.jpg
- this is a typo of Taiga which oughta say Antares anyhow
• G.U. 03https://i.imgur.com/DskKoSb.jpg
- not sure about this onehttps://i.imgur.com/PIkXaWD.jpg
• Grand Whalehttps://i.imgur.com/kon9UaE.jpg
- Final Labyrinth under another name?
• AI buster 02https://i.imgur.com/EexASC8.jpg
- "This is the period before Tokio met the leaders of the era-upa."
• LotT 04https://i.imgur.com/6cxQOI3.jpg
- "This is four years after Tokio met the .hackers-upa."https://i.imgur.com/u1YAAHb.jpg
- "...It doesn't seem like the Cobalt Knights are here."https://i.imgur.com/oVJFKzl.jpg
- think this conversation is due some rephrasinghttps://i.imgur.com/6aaxmKH.jpg
- aside from Zefie being mispelled again this sounds odd
• G.U. 04https://i.imgur.com/J0f6cVY.jpg
- pretty sure the "I" here should be a "you"https://i.imgur.com/rrd7aqi.jpg
- an perhaps "I'll" oughta be "They'll" since Tokio's not there to fight but to watchhttps://i.imgur.com/6jGT5Cm.jpg
- heres another bit of conversation I gots trouble following -.-;https://i.imgur.com/sjtwbUf.jpg
- hows about knocking the d offa that And at the starthttps://i.imgur.com/bb7OwOP.jpg
- hey now Haseo's not a champ yethttps://i.imgur.com/cJBpQf9.jpg
- still not a champ yet!https://i.imgur.com/vfWnUeB.jpg
- this is abit backwards since he's in Lumina Cloth an is heading to Mac Anuhttps://i.imgur.com/tneVlXW.jpg
- think I get the gist of what she's saying but it could be written more clearly
• Grand Whalehttps://i.imgur.com/i9SGe5u.jpg
- I think this is him being concerned over AIKA not being able to track Haseo so maybe it'd look better as "...AIKA doesn't know when Haseo's logged in..."https://i.imgur.com/gYDKw96.jpg
- both "you" should be "we"
• G.U. 05https://i.imgur.com/YXD1mf2.jpg
- "Why does this name... worry me?" could replace the first linehttps://i.imgur.com/cFGu6Vy.jpg
- "...she definitely knows the name..."https://i.imgur.com/ChHUs4n.jpg
- "Ahh?! I told you?!"
• AI buster 03https://i.imgur.com/vGDP9lk.jpg
- "This is the period before you met the leaders of the previous era-upa."https://i.imgur.com/v9ureJi.jpg
- I dunno, that explanation of Lyco's alil weird sounding to mehttps://i.imgur.com/BndN9Aj.jpg
- also weird soundinghttps://i.imgur.com/PECA2ki.jpg
- whys he calling it Albireo's spear?
• G.U. 07https://i.imgur.com/vRAH6Xk.jpg
- Dol Dona's been typo'd once morehttps://i.imgur.com/Ei9N0jA.jpg
- and Tri-Edge is lower cased againhttps://i.imgur.com/pPeZ28Z.jpg
- Skeiths also been typo'dhttps://i.imgur.com/Siaelm9.jpg
- this is another that may be correct an I'm simply misreading, but I figured Atoli is talking about Haseo in which case "I" should be "you"
• Grand Whalehttps://i.imgur.com/DEoxliu.jpg
- errr... dun think this is quite righthttps://i.imgur.com/l104Fl0.jpg
- should at least one of the "I" here actually be a "she"?https://i.imgur.com/CRrIQzb.jpg
- Tokio didn't get angry so isn't this him more being thankful she didn't get upset/angry?https://i.imgur.com/XCxf0CE.jpg
- seems like whomevers being talked about has gotten mixed up again
• AI buster 04https://i.imgur.com/zNQIP6R.jpg
- "This is before Tokio met the leaders of the previous era-upa."https://i.imgur.com/7MNMJdn.jpg
- slight consistency issue, up until now Vagrant AI has been used so it being Wandering here may warrant a change?
• LotT 05https://i.imgur.com/JcmRYMV.jpg
- I'm still not getting this bit
• G.U. 08https://i.imgur.com/M8rAOb4.jpg
- I dun get ithttps://i.imgur.com/TnZF8Ch.jpg
- no announcer, you didn't be anybody lol. "I' should be "He"https://i.imgur.com/etBFRUu.jpg
- I remember a line like this from Rebirth but it was clearer than thishttps://i.imgur.com/UHCcwSS.jpg
- is this supposed to be "noisy"? cause I could also see it being "nosey"https://i.imgur.com/WCIWOHL.jpg
- also the rest of that conversation is wtf material
• G.U. 09https://i.imgur.com/EFujPR3.jpg
- Haseo's already there so maybe the lines more like "Why has Haseo gone to Moon Tree at a time like this?"https://i.imgur.com/5KPgzxN.jpg
- is this supposed ta be what Ovan said in Reminisce that "epitaphs are drawn to aida and aida to epitaphs"?https://i.imgur.com/Kp7aSKW.jpg
- "I want you to rush to the scene with Pi to suppress AIDA and restrain Haseo."https://i.imgur.com/lgVbVBb.jpg
- "know" should be "knew"https://i.imgur.com/xVFy5UU.jpg
- what'd she give him? her trust?https://i.imgur.com/yFdna2c.jpg
- this'd make more sense if "from" was changed to "of"https://i.imgur.com/2c5wy7n.jpg
- unless I'm misunderstanding this doesn't really fit with the trashtalking Atoli stuffhttps://i.imgur.com/w7wLSXY.jpg
- oughta change "We" to "I"https://i.imgur.com/7cp3U91.jpg
- should the second part here be something like "Those two are being eroded by AIDA." ?https://i.imgur.com/USoamD4.jpg
- another "we" to be switched with an "I"
• G.U. 10https://i.imgur.com/zPCif1v.jpg
- I'd change "is meeting" to "wants to meet"https://i.imgur.com/y2gwnpa.jpg
- an here "I will make" to "I made"https://i.imgur.com/mywIpsb.jpg
- Tri-edge makes another returnhttps://i.imgur.com/ryThm52.jpg
- I'm not followinghttps://i.imgur.com/C2md1XS.jpg
- "Stuffed Chim" or "Chim Plush Doll" ?https://i.imgur.com/GZE3knq.jpg
- ya can't just suggest something then say its forbidden!
• G.U. 11https://i.imgur.com/Gn2GNNx.jpg
- sorry but this all sounds mangledhttps://i.imgur.com/ZzBYYaM.jpg
- the previous two times "tournament" was used but here and another time after its "Tournament" as if it mattershttps://i.imgur.com/q1xrR79.jpg
- thats a strange name. no biggie just wanted to put it out therehttps://i.imgur.com/HhECOJ1.jpg
- looks like a stray + sign found its way into some dialoguehttps://i.imgur.com/EU2kgo1.jpg-
• Grand Whalehttps://i.imgur.com/RFJVCr6.jpg
- "he" instead of "I"
• G.U. 12https://i.imgur.com/uzCxeHI.jpg
- "Where have you been until now?!" or "Why haven't you been seen until now?!" would be suitable fixes for the second sentencehttps://i.imgur.com/hp6aY8S.jpg
- isn't this the famous "Do you not wish to finally know the truth?" line?https://i.imgur.com/hpAYoOY.jpg
- still pointing out lowercased edgehttps://i.imgur.com/DLU83Jg.jpg
- I dun think this comes across at allhttps://i.imgur.com/IvVo6KC.jpg
- the only "guy" theres Tokio that oughta be changed to "woman"https://i.imgur.com/lu60eAT.jpg
- is the second sentence supposed to be a question? isn't she warning/advising him to scram?https://i.imgur.com/ZjCR2zH.jpg
- gonna request "network" be added in between "entire will"
• Cell 01https://i.imgur.com/p5IHmIu.jpg
- ack! her dialogue box is busted! what'd she say??https://i.imgur.com/Rius9FT.jpg
- "Professional Victim" is now "Assault Dealer" ? Professional Victim is used in Cell 02 and other places for the record so only this'd need to be changed. also "must not have said to strike" ?https://i.imgur.com/WgruTt6.jpg
- not following this bit of the conversation
• G.U. 13
- "Stuffed Chim" was displayed in G.U. 10, "Chim Plush Doll" is in the inventory, an now here we gots "Chim Doll" o.o
• Cell 02https://i.imgur.com/BZE6tCR.jpg
- Nala is very much not a girl so o.o?https://i.imgur.com/EOP6GUO.jpg
- should "I" be "it" ?
• Roots 13https://i.imgur.com/075Hph4.jpg
- wonder if "guildmaster" should be "in the guild" since Kuhn was never the direct GMhttps://i.imgur.com/NWavmNv.jpg
- "I don't think to fight" ?
• Link 07https://i.imgur.com/whO4SAw.jpg
- this is perplexinghttps://i.imgur.com/cqLS7kY.jpg
- so's this!https://i.imgur.com/J2qIbnZ.jpg
- tbh I think this whoooole conversation accessible from where the first pic shows needs to be looked over. especially so when its got a gem as seen in the second pic!https://i.imgur.com/m2rP6Ub.jpg
- is he talking to himself? he's the one been asking questions?https://i.imgur.com/uo5ThYa.jpg
- I dun think Aura invoked the virus? a line soon after says it was invoked upon herhttps://i.imgur.com/eYMkPk6.jpg
- Geist ya didn't do crap. should the first bits be "You Real Digitalized" ?https://i.imgur.com/kXaHTw2.jpg
- "The Dancer and the Beast. And you're both in good health above all else." is best I can make outta thishttps://i.imgur.com/687Kmgs.jpg
- since the mails from her should "their" be "my" instead?https://i.imgur.com/OjlGsvy.jpg
- also... EOL!! from here out the conversation between Tokio and AIKA falls outta sync with them saying one anothers lines an ends as the second pic shows. this for reals needs a fix!
• Grand Whalehttps://i.imgur.com/D769bLr.jpg
- this comes across as sounding very literalhttps://i.imgur.com/M59PSvm.jpg
- I think the "a" oughta be "the"https://i.imgur.com/K81ISo5.jpg
- "...and these anomalies are occuring in The World R:X." since he's talking about such things going downhttps://i.imgur.com/krElbyu.jpg
- "we"? is Tokio deciding this as leader of the Twilight Knights?
• Alcor 01https://i.imgur.com/VR4svge.jpg
- Silabus says they're the support group so was Tokio just confused over his role here?https://i.imgur.com/X1p75y8.jpg
- oh ya something def confusing here. he wants to help Nanase behind the scenes as secret support so its her he doesn't wanna be seen byhttps://i.imgur.com/YiSQiF3.jpg
- ya, more backwards ideas here
• Link 08https://i.imgur.com/BZAz7Qr.jpg
- what time and woman?https://i.imgur.com/31EKm7b.jpg
- I dun get ithttps://i.imgur.com/qKRwjKO.jpg
- "Uh... Cello you're not coming to the Grand Whale?"https://i.imgur.com/v07pAPA.jpg
- "I" not "you"
• Link 08 / Grand Whalehttps://i.imgur.com/HEC2PRv.jpg
- "Twilight Omen", "Corrupted Twilight Data", "Evil Omen Twilight Data" which is it??https://i.imgur.com/PRuHvYi.jpg
- this bit needs some shortening, somehowhttps://i.imgur.com/7I6Lotn.jpg
- um did he? it didn't come across the way.
• G.U. 15https://i.imgur.com/rKBrx8A.jpg
- isn't the problem that Yata felt he wasn't blessed?
• Link 09https://i.imgur.com/uJ7iKwB.jpg
- alil confused by this one since Geist hasn't implied he was related to Jyotaro as of yet. if she's thinking Geist is her brother then the "his" should be a "my" I believe?https://i.imgur.com/PoxvPGd.jpg
- which is it o.o? weird ta be certain of something then immediately uncertainhttps://i.imgur.com/gomLels.jpg
- kind of a strange thought herehttps://i.imgur.com/QSlJEjh.jpg
- should "life" instead be "flesh"? cause otherwise thats a uhhh real bonkers thing to sayhttps://i.imgur.com/3eZLpxm.jpg
- also huh? other than "you" prolly being "us" the "the man with the knife" part is a weird way to put ithttps://i.imgur.com/fki6rpN.jpg
- wouldn't "I'm" be "It's"?https://i.imgur.com/oZDjjNd.jpg
- an here "A" oughta be "I"
• Grand Whalehttps://i.imgur.com/LedcAkS.jpg
- "Klarinette was really pleased with you." is what I'm getting here
• G.U. 14https://i.imgur.com/kvXvB6s.jpg
- that sentence ends abruptlyhttps://i.imgur.com/awHWEvW.jpg
- the heck is this conversation?
• Roots 14https://i.imgur.com/tjhhcuW.jpg
- EOL strikes again! doesn't cause any probs here since its the last line of the conversation but heyhttps://i.imgur.com/bt1zEbL.jpg
- "come to us for help" since beginners helping Canard dun make alot of sense. also they're being targetted by chaotic pks an as beginners they wouldn't be much helphttps://i.imgur.com/kvIGrku.jpg
- who's the "you" here?
• Link 10https://i.imgur.com/BQamk1g.jpg
- "This is the area we learned about from Klarinette! Tokio, are you ready?"https://i.imgur.com/UTsS5EP.jpg
- he's doing what?!https://i.imgur.com/cebwEDK.jpg
- should "unstable" be "destabilized"?https://i.imgur.com/cSGO99G.jpg
- "...Geist was crushed by Jyotaro Amagi..."
• Grand Whalehttps://i.imgur.com/iUgqiGZ.jpg
• Roots 15https://i.imgur.com/fM4Wgpi.jpg
- that Area descriptions silly O.o "It seems to be a place with terrible lag." is that how it should go?https://i.imgur.com/9mZKhL7.jpg
- isn't this one of those situations where he usually says something like "for now, lets go to the end of the area"? sounds like he's saying go back to town despite having just gotten to the Areahttps://i.imgur.com/9ngLdbz.jpg
- the naming of this bugged monster strays from their normal naming scheme. is it umm actually bugged o.o?
• G.U. 19https://i.imgur.com/ywSUu2h.jpg
- Gaspards supposed to be telling Tokio the Area Wordshttps://i.imgur.com/Pc8o3fx.jpg
- "Tokio, the person Haseo's meeting... By any chance, could it be..." is my take on this line cause Tokio sure doesn't know who Haseo's meeting withhttps://i.imgur.com/hIeaYzA.jpg
- is this some 4th wall breaking?
• G.U. Returnerhttps://i.imgur.com/umBmi77.jpg
- got a Gord typo here. this is the only spot I noticed "Gordo" being used fwiwhttps://i.imgur.com/Bgon8FW.jpg
- this line seem weird to anyone else?
• Link 11https://i.imgur.com/A5nn7Wo.jpg
- the from has now become "Discount Ticket"?https://i.imgur.com/ULsEs1p.jpg
- typo here. that "I" should be "A"https://i.imgur.com/agRRcn1.jpg
- "...It's settled down..." would be more appropriate
• Grand Whalehttps://i.imgur.com/KpHfezs.jpg
- o.O Tokio no you're not the villian!!https://i.imgur.com/yIGqR6Q.jpg
- I don't get this weak insult regarding Flugelhttps://i.imgur.com/vCD3lfk.jpg
- he's not being sincere right??https://i.imgur.com/Cbf9ZRS.jpg
- again with the weak thing
• Link 12https://i.imgur.com/hhNZGeu.jpg
- this sentence is kinda borked sounding so hows about "I've come to return Kite to normal. Where's his statue?"https://i.imgur.com/j23KPLv.jpg
- I think "we've" should be changed either to "he's" or "it's" since its in reference to Kites statuehttps://i.imgur.com/brbLWI4.jpg
- I'm not really sure what thats supposed ta meanhttps://i.imgur.com/q64gadp.jpg
- recommend a change to "The stone statue of Kite should be somewhere in this area... Waaaah!!" cause as-is it sounds like theres more than one Kite statuehttps://i.imgur.com/ovhO637.jpg
- this is wonky soundinghttps://i.imgur.com/zZbKZOZ.jpg
- the "was freed by" part would be better if it were "will be free from"https://i.imgur.com/0EXvH0v.jpg
- not quite getting thishttps://i.imgur.com/iZgbDnE.jpg
- would maybe change "I'm" into "its"https://i.imgur.com/nBAQ5AL.jpg
- "disciple"? thought the azures were always refered to as her knightshttps://i.imgur.com/1nZF9Q0.jpg
- "Don't worry, I'll buy some time. If I do it right, you can escape." is how I'd read thishttps://i.imgur.com/7VjhUM8.jpg
- Flugel went on the attack so wouldn't "attacked" be "defeated" instead?https://i.imgur.com/JKOSig3.jpg
• Grand Whalehttps://i.imgur.com/2dX9sus.jpg
- lost the starting word of both lines, plus "check" seems like it oughta be "assume" in this contexthttps://i.imgur.com/ckbh9CS.jpg
- this whole conversation around Saika's guilt & trustworthiness & the vaccine plan needs a lookover. alot of iffy parts in therehttps://i.imgur.com/wyCoBSY.jpg
- what even is that second sentence supposed to mean?
• Alcor 02https://i.imgur.com/CdrQR3X.jpg
- Tokio had previously referred to Sophora as she/her so that "He's" seems outta placehttps://i.imgur.com/TcMdc7h.jpg
- should "the other" be "another"?https://i.imgur.com/bQRagGJ.jpg
- okay? this is not clear to me at allhttps://i.imgur.com/BqubO7R.jpg
- "his"? by this point both Tokio and Alkaid had use she/her for Sophora
• G.U. 16https://i.imgur.com/lcMF3dZ.jpg
- the "h" in "how" should be capitalized no?https://i.imgur.com/wwIkJz1.jpg
- this sentence isn't alrighthttps://i.imgur.com/0Yt9pnY.jpg
- an this coming after isn't quite adding up for me
• G.U. 17https://i.imgur.com/sNarjp8.jpg
- what a strange an bold thing to say!
• Link 21https://i.imgur.com/ZpRwEU6.jpg
- the items called "Resurrection Symbol" in the inventory, prompt for obtaining it, and prompt for using it to unlock this episode
• Link 13https://i.imgur.com/1qE61iG.jpg
- Toki-runtys the one thats gonna let Tokio know herehttps://i.imgur.com/K866cxi.jpg
- wait I thought Jyotaro had made the Akashic Records many years prior?https://i.imgur.com/oHNdQlA.jpg
- should the "had" be a "were"?https://i.imgur.com/NpzvYVe.jpg
- sounds like he's praising her O.o; and I guess if he is than thats perfectly fine dialogue-wise! although its not helping with morale lol!https://i.imgur.com/dnDcA0u.jpg
- the "hear" could use a slight change to "heard" I feel
• G.U. 18https://i.imgur.com/4hki9ZG.jpg
- whoaaa big glitching out here. the text in the dialogue box was flickering an looking like it was cycling letters/numbers like mad as if it were struggling to load the text! in the end no matter how long I waited, it did not load and what little on display I can make out is gibberish! "Savp/ネ p/ネ ⬛"
• Roots 12https://i.imgur.com/IdPlfzZ.jpg
- the area names kinda not fitting into its spacehttps://i.imgur.com/p4maAry.jpg
- "Say" should be "Says"? alternatively "You say he prays" would be a good start of that sentencehttps://i.imgur.com/fK0hk1a.jpg
- "are you okay with that?" not getting the meaning here. infact those words pop up a bunch an usually leave me wondering why its being said
• G.U. 20https://i.imgur.com/2VJgeo1.jpg
- hows it useless? its how ya get there afterallhttps://i.imgur.com/kVxj5q0.jpg
- "Area that garnered a smile" is this supposed to be a pun? cause it is pretty amusing!https://i.imgur.com/7LEr1OE.jpg
- I'm not getting this, also "called out" is another frequently used line which doesn't come across right to me
• Link 14https://i.imgur.com/hOxG26c.jpg
- what in the hecks this supposed ta mean?
• Link 15https://i.imgur.com/H04A5hD.jpg
- bomb?! I thought it was a bullet!https://i.imgur.com/8tt5nBR.jpg
- think the "you" would sound better as a "we"https://i.imgur.com/Vlhz6SB.jpg
- similarly, "you've" could be switched to 'we've" perhaps?https://i.imgur.com/wdqzF3S.jpg
- an here "this" may be "the"https://i.imgur.com/QukzGGy.jpg
- dunno why but "Aura's core" sounds weird to mehttps://i.imgur.com/I9V4lYG.jpg
- I'd say "came" would be better as "is"https://i.imgur.com/QbrnMW3.jpg
- is this 4th wall breaking? if not who's he talking to I wonder?https://i.imgur.com/p3h5DuV.jpg
- ok the "source" of Aura's even weirder sounding than corehttps://i.imgur.com/fxMdPoZ.jpg
- should "they're" be "we're"?https://i.imgur.com/HaZKyFN.jpg
- I think this could use a re-writehttps://i.imgur.com/pACKiwB.jpg
- black curse? why not just use brainwashing? no need to throw in some random new term at the very end herehttps://i.imgur.com/74fIMih.jpg
- yeahhh in all honesty I feel this entire converstation should be looked over an it can conveniently be found where the second pics showing!https://i.imgur.com/9gxMMMW.jpg
- ditto for this convo. no good ending the game having to read between some strangely written lines!https://i.imgur.com/TuQoWlb.jpg
- .hack//T??? okay I super LOL'd at this. last screen of the game/credits and we got text overflowing out of bounds. really the only way it could've ended hehe!
• Grand Whalehttps://i.imgur.com/5AoRcfC.jpg
- gotta switch that he and is around!https://i.imgur.com/qFmAwcE.jpg
- an once again Tokio's got weird words towards Flugel. you'd think he'd be angry not sorry
• Link 19https://i.imgur.com/691nYdR.jpg
- on the acquisition prompt and inventory its "Queen Symbol" but here its "Symbol of the Queen"https://i.imgur.com/to6qI9e.jpg
- ack! garbled text!
• G.U.+ 01https://i.imgur.com/FSqhVA0.jpg
- not sure "the" is needed in therehttps://i.imgur.com/XyMSx6t.jpg
- at the start of the mission we were told Kazumi was in a coma. if they knew that then they knew where he was at so them having "found" him afterwards seems odd? that whole second sentence is also odd!
• G.U. Trilogy 01https://i.imgur.com/JIkqgj0.jpg
- thats a strange line to end the episode on or I'm just not getting ithttps://i.imgur.com/y7VJwh6.jpg
- in the story bits it was called a "vagrant AI" but here its "wandering"?
• XXXX 01https://i.imgur.com/2dx7WK0.jpg
- dude Kites right there o.o;https://i.imgur.com/rntIPBK.jpg
- whats this "anti-Cubia presence" business about?https://i.imgur.com/LiaNSn6.jpg
- I'm not getting the second sentence herehttps://i.imgur.com/9kXKRQx.jpg
- the "Come" feels like it oughta be a "Go"
• Link 16https://i.imgur.com/jeSSAOD.jpg
- was the "Mother Data" we were seeking a codename or something for "Amagi's Files"? if so then this can easily be disregarded!
• Link 17https://i.imgur.com/4uK7mh5.jpg
- similar to G.U. 18 we've got some bugged out text here!https://i.imgur.com/3WzJQFH.jpg
- think that "an" needs ta drop its nhttps://i.imgur.com/fhessBT.jpg
- got that reversal thing going on here. Flugels asking to look over the items that Tokio found so the "you" and first "I' should swap placeshttps://i.imgur.com/Ue6QIbz.jpg-
an after the items handed over the rest of the scene ends abruptly despite there being alil more dialogue left
• Link 18https://i.imgur.com/2vS4raW.jpg
- whats that second sentence mean?
- accidentally called Carl a himhttps://i.imgur.com/g6EenK9.jpg
- the K in Kite is lower case! Oh no!https://i.imgur.com/xkjG6kT.jpg
- got some text flowing offscreen here.https://i.imgur.com/X1Qc3ZL.jpg
- offscreen text in these as wellhttps://i.imgur.com/AHzxIr5.jpg
- offscreen text and unless Posaune speaks in third person some of this reads strangelyhttps://i.imgur.com/wWzzbTo.jpg
- mail names to long, maybe "Help my older brother" would fit more?https://i.imgur.com/lQOH625.jpg
- thinking making the second reply be "I'll look forward to the abilities of Kite's partner!" would sound more naturalhttps://i.imgur.com/qAezZMs.jpg
- the "your" in the first reply should prolly be a "my" or even just an "a"https://i.imgur.com/bz4jkGP.jpg
- the first "I' here should be "I'll"https://i.imgur.com/Eyi2zsL.jpg
- this reply made sense up until these last two sentences O.o?https://i.imgur.com/Rc8wQgk.jpg
- they assembled a monument? "tower"? "I think you believe there's a place to use the monument." ??? also "Coite-Bodher" is misspelled herehttps://i.imgur.com/kAmRlaO.jpg
- I'd add a "was" to the first line to make it "It seems I was used by him"https://i.imgur.com/ZqwSoaZ.jpg
- scared or scary? could go either way but I thought I'd put it out therehttps://i.imgur.com/WEHkRRO.jpg
- whats that last line mean?https://i.imgur.com/MFiJIT3.jpg
- that subject goes waaaay offscreen in both instanceshttps://i.imgur.com/4MLRUdX.jpg
- this reply to one of Tabby's friendship mails still has some jp text left in ithttps://i.imgur.com/U9Tewjd.jpg
- the subjects wrong since she is asking Tokio out on an adventurehttps://i.imgur.com/9120mBY.jpg
- the last bit of the first reply option may be better off changing "your" to "a"https://i.imgur.com/Do9aAD0.jpg
- this mail and the replies dun feel like they belong togetherhttps://i.imgur.com/XQ4gUbq.jpg
- got some more offscreen text herehttps://i.imgur.com/zfPHGs1.jpg
- we've gots some offscreen text again, plus "The Machinator" has an extra quote mark at the start. also I think the "and Haseo... I intended to" needs a "him" after intendedhttps://i.imgur.com/yroym8t.jpg
- the subjects too long again!https://i.imgur.com/Lciaabt.jpg
- the first reply choice is... huh?https://i.imgur.com/dwGNH1K.jpg
- I think this mails abit on the rigid sounding side. the replies to it as wellhttps://i.imgur.com/jIzitoI.jpg
- more wandering セ@. these are a very recurring thing an I'm curious if they gots more ta do with code than text?https://i.imgur.com/aXNF9qO.jpg
- "The door blocking Aura is known in cyberspace" huh?https://i.imgur.com/576zdRz.jpg
- a new case of a subject being to long but realistically what could it even be condensed to?https://i.imgur.com/abuoojN.jpg
- as with all things Cell this comes across strangely like she's talking about her two different selves but not?https://i.imgur.com/YL5bNx2.jpg
- to long! to long!https://i.imgur.com/iA9xV7B.jpg
- think the first "I" in the second reply is supposed to be a "You"https://i.imgur.com/qutRKOJ.jpg
- theres sooo much offscreening going on herehttps://i.imgur.com/6xKRLa9.jpg
- oops. some of that upper reply went outta the box.https://i.imgur.com/kCiP5TA.jpg
- that first sentence is abit backwards given their goalhttps://i.imgur.com/2uRmcI4.jpg
- this entire mail is long and full of some not so great wording. whole thing could use a lookoverhttps://i.imgur.com/QzHZyUd.jpg
- dun get the second sentence herehttps://i.imgur.com/V9hlRVX.jpg
- there a random period after other and "forgot" should be "forget" maybe?https://i.imgur.com/4a5YGtn.jpg
- I'm really not following those first two sentences. also the subject is "Trust him" but idk who he's talking abouthttps://i.imgur.com/uc9k2dr.jpg
- the subject gets cutoff abit inside the mail itself an this is happening alot. I'm wondering if subject, request, or both could be abbreviated in someway that'd make sensehttps://i.imgur.com/7BSZi54.jpg
- one of the replies to Kaede's first mails results in a subject thats out of bounds in a completely different way!https://i.imgur.com/5Z2nSjn.jpg
- in the subject whys 2 of the 3 words start with a capitalize letter? also theres a typo in the body "thonk" should be "think" right?https://i.imgur.com/xYvJeLB.jpg
- in the first reply "I" should be "you" and "my" should be "your"https://i.imgur.com/oQLSoiu.jpg
- did Ovan find Ovan?https://i.imgur.com/hpi3dis.jpg
- another subject too longhttps://i.imgur.com/rso2In4.jpg
- to long here as well. also "Fluegel" has appaeared! whole rest of the game it had steadily been "Flugel". guess this mail got missed in one of the later editting passeshttps://i.imgur.com/Q0gQ1JH.jpg
- I read that first sentence as "Discipline is lacking on the Grand Whale, is it not, Tokio?" since the rest of its about implimenting rules an stuffshttps://i.imgur.com/am8DSqK.jpg
- this things names just to long to fit!https://i.imgur.com/K6NBMu0.jpg
- think that first reply oughta start with "A" instead of "An"https://i.imgur.com/UijKxIv.jpg
- the #2 in the title gets cutoff here and "Fluegel" is back!
• in general there seems ta be room for 40 characters (spaces included) within the borders here. and room for 7 lines total below the term names. so for instance:https://i.imgur.com/X1IGoxp.jpg
- adding a line break after "The World." would make this fit in all the more naturally
• theres abit of a recurring issue with some database entries: the term name is repeated twice which eats up one of the available lines.https://i.imgur.com/6PDQZSo.jpg
- here, "Saika Amagi." could be removed and free up that line.
A domineering girl who transferred to
Tokio's class. Age 14. Excellent grades
and reflexes. In order to return the
Akashic Records to normal, she sends
Tokio into The World and guides him in
a quest for Chrono Cores.
also restructuring each lines 40 character cut-off point allows it all to fit!https://i.imgur.com/CkKEC3d.jpg
[The World R:X]
An online game published by CC Corp in
2020. Its previous fame was high and
accounts were drawn by lottery with
previous subscribers given priority.
Many users wanted accounts long after
service started and wait lists were as
long as six months.
I changed "It" to "Its" here btw.https://i.imgur.com/VU2FyoG.jpg
Its official name is CyberConnect, but
this abbreviation is commonly used. It
grew in size due to the popularity of
The World and became a large
changed some wording here since "usually called by its short form" sounded strange.https://i.imgur.com/iPyPxHn.jpg
Each time a version changes, new jobs
are added and various play-styles can
be used depending on the
characteristics of each job.
changed "a new job is added" to "new jobs are added"https://i.imgur.com/nXMTVi8.jpg
A place that serves as a base of
operations. When a players logs in or
returns from a field, they're always
transferred to a town. Towns have
facilities like quest shops and item
A digital disaster.
A worldwide network problem that occurred
due to a virus. It caused damage to many
types of infastructure including finance,
communications, transportation and the
again we have redundancy here with "Network Crisis" used back to backhttps://i.imgur.com/64nA79P.jpg
The mobile computer popularized by
students in 2019. It has versatility
comparable to that of a PC and
convenience similar to a game system.
Abundant color choices and custom skins
caught the hearts of users, selling about
110 million units worldwide.
had to shorten an re-write the heck outta this one but I feel that all the points are gotten across!https://i.imgur.com/QjcnRcS.jpg
Only Tokio has this special ability to
synchronize with the spirit of friends
who adventure with him. During Unison,
Tokio can use the abilities of his Unison
partner and certain parameters will
swapped an "or" for an "and" here.https://i.imgur.com/KUIv1V5.jpg
Creatures that can be raised on the ranch
of a Root Town, first appearing in R:1.
They grow by being fed various grunty
foods. With different foods, they can
grow into different kinds of adults.
Did alil rewriting here.https://i.imgur.com/B2Mp3oq.jpg
[.hack Works 3]
The story of the birth of the Ultimate AI
Aura. The awakening of The World's
Goddess begins as the hero - who cannot
log out - and his colleagues confront the
mysteries of The World.
removed an extra "the" that was in there and moved the "who cannot log out" part since otherwise it looks to imply that none of them can log out when its just the hero who can't.https://i.imgur.com/ajxPAG7.jpg
The ability to modify and overwrite game
data. It is a powerful technique mainly
used by the owner of the Twilight
Bracelet. It is effective against non-spec
entities such as Data Bugs.
just making it all fit.https://i.imgur.com/pkhN4Qf.jpg
Derived from the eight phases of the
Cursed Wave which appears in the Epitaph
of Twilight. They chased Aura as
Morganna's incarnations, and fought the
same as above.https://i.imgur.com/acDUDR9.jpg
Schicksal's No. 8. The Illusionist.
He hides his face behind a mask and acts
mysteriously. He is the only Schicksal
member to join on CC Corp's
since in a story scene Geist introduces himself as an Illusionist I replaced Magician. bumped recommendation down a line so it fits nice an proper to.https://i.imgur.com/82T0pqB.jpg
- nothing wrong here aside from "Operation Tetrapod." being redundant texthttps://i.imgur.com/oPsw0fY.jpg
[Eight Phases Corbenik
Blocked by members of Operation Tetrapod
as the last of the Eight Phases.
While overwhelming Kite and the others
with its immense power, Lost Ones, led
by Aura, came to the rescue and
the first sentence is weird imo. I changed "his" to "its" and then just made the rest fit. also suggesting removing the "Eight Phases" part infront of Corbenik and Skeith's entrieshttps://i.imgur.com/Gk6tZNE.jpg
The generic name for a normally impossible
phenomenon that occurs in The World.
Sentient data with the form of black
bubbles that amplifies a player's
emotions and makes them go crazy.
changed "foam" into "bubbles" here an made the rest fithttps://i.imgur.com/578v3r6.jpg
- "Though she was linked with Tsukasa's mind in order to awaken, she awakened normally with Tsukasa's mind." can't make heads or tails of this but all the rest of this entry reads finehttps://i.imgur.com/e0RG33c.jpg
- Orgels a fire-breather? who uses no weapons? an then theres all the rest of it. is this really talking about the same guy?https://i.imgur.com/KQst86m.jpg
- "Signs of the End" is that another name for the "Final Symbol"?https://i.imgur.com/hNLbE5J.jpg
[Key of the Twilight]
A phantom item that is regarded as a
key that can grant desires. It is said
to exist in The World to lead it in
a better direction.
just took out the redundant first line. could also shorten it to "Key of Twilight" as the Roots/G.U. localizations did so it'd fit within the column on the lefthttps://i.imgur.com/fsWNmwV.jpg
A non-spec item that should not exist in
The World. Haseo discovered that is
resonates with the pillars in the Lost
Ground, Coite-Bodher Battlefield.
shouldn't this be "Sacred Stone" (if not Virus Core)? anyways this fixes the spacing and I added "the Lost Ground" for alil more detailhttps://i.imgur.com/VRJxgEd.jpg
The former girlfriend of Tomonari Kasumi,
Sieg's player. She formed a relationship
with him and they were attacked together
in The World by Skeith Zero. Although
Tomonari became comatose, Mai
regained consciousness and unraveled
the truth in the real world.
more box fitting. plus I question the use of "relationship" over "party"https://i.imgur.com/dDHtv4G.jpg
A guild run inside CC Corp. as the base of
the Serpent of Lore. The guildmaster is
Yata. The main members are Pi and Kuhn.
It was set up as a secret organization in
The World in order to investigate the
AIDA phenomenon among the general
In the fragment era, these were created
based on the Epitaph of Twilight's
worldview, but were hidden after the
update to R:1. After they were
discovered one by one in R:2, they
became a hot topic among users, were
given official backstories by CC Corp.
had to shorten this abit so it'd all fithttps://i.imgur.com/MoBsUx1.jpg
- wouldn't know how to abbreviate this any but wanted to point out how far outta bounds this entry name goes!https://i.imgur.com/07vkp6S.jpg
A guild composed only of Emporers. It
was founded by the first Demon Palace
Emporer, Antares. There is a strict no
non-Emporer policy and the members'
pride causes a lot of friction. The current
guildmaster is Taihaku. The core members
are Antares, Taihaku, Sirius, and Alkaid.
removed two mentions of Palace an renamed Taika to Antares to fix this one up!https://i.imgur.com/xQDR20Q.jpg
- that first sentence is just huh?? also shouldn't sickle be scythe going by G.U. terminology?https://i.imgur.com/osRj1x0.jpg
With this, an Epitaph User will be able
to call upon an Avatar's power. An
Avatar cannot be used right from the
start, but is mentally pursued. Each
person must fulfill certain conditions
before awakening as an Epitaph User
for the first time.
removed redundant word and rewrote just alil bithttps://i.imgur.com/kUTOkiT.jpg
A meeting of the seven captains of
Moon Tree. Zelkova, Sakaki and other
five other captains each lead a faction
within within the guild.
heavily rewrote this one cause that one really dun come across right to mehttps://i.imgur.com/EpMoNIo.jpg
An experimental being produced by
trial and error in order to create the
Ultimate AI. The official opinion of
CC Corp., is that they're simply bugs
or have been put into the server by
hackers and are subject to deletion.
changed just alil bit and made it fithttps://i.imgur.com/2S7d9WA.jpg
A place in Warring City Lumina Cloth
where players can compete against each
other. There are three palaces: the
Demon Palace, the Holy Palace, and the
Sage Palace. The strongest player in
each reigns as the Palace Emporer.
see? Warring City! anyways this oughta fit nowhttps://i.imgur.com/YdWJRZf.jpg
A Town made during the update to R:2,
known as the Warring City. As its name
suggests, it contains the Arena, a
public facility were adventurers compete
for power and fame.
the first bit sounded redundant so I rewrote ithttps://i.imgur.com/Tji3zmV.jpg
A technology that sends humans into a
game alive. Those who enter the game,
will, in theory, be able to live forever
as a pure mental form without a physical
body. However, there are no successful
cases except for those who are
booted that first line an got the to fithttps://i.imgur.com/KqOORBS.jpg
[.hack Works 10]
.hack//Legend of the Twilight Bracelet
(Manga/Anime). A story that takes place
four years after .hack (Game). A new
legend begins in The World when Shugo
and Rena are selected to receive Kite
and BlackRose PCs.
made this fit!https://i.imgur.com/n8IAVi8.jpg
- that first sentence is just huh?? last ones also alil ?https://i.imgur.com/I02KLuM.jpg
- Tri-edge returns!https://i.imgur.com/OA97c12.jpg
[.hack Works 12]
It follows Midori, a player who works as
a Professional Victim alongside Adamas.
In time, she realizes that her
perceptions of her real self and her PC
self are misaligned.
A Lord Partizan in Moon Tree. He leads
the fourth division which conducts
information gathering. He is another PC
used by Yata.
changed the second line a littlehttps://i.imgur.com/7j5WrX5.jpg
[Forest of Pain]
A limited time solo quest published
in 2016 as a dungeon in which a player
must overcome harsh conditions in order
to obtain a mighy power in a short
amount of time.
changed abit an made it fit!https://i.imgur.com/0lSQsL8.jpg
- at this point I think "Tri-edge" has been used far more times than "Tri-Edge" e.e;https://i.imgur.com/zbsi6g1.jpg
Has the nickname Kaochin in the Shadows
as a Chaotic PK. Dislikes the Crimson
Knights and stalked its leader, Subaru.
He has the same PC type as Subaru and
this seems to be why he bares ill will
changes "stands alone" to "in the Shadows", "surveilled" to "stalked", and "central figure" to "leader"https://i.imgur.com/ybVN0VF.jpg
Immortal Dusk, which Jyotaro Amagi
advocated and Geist carried out, was a
plan to forcibly apply Real
Digitalization to all humans using the
ultimate AI, Aura.
fixed the forcibly typo an made the rest fithttps://i.imgur.com/UBWdrgT.jpg
Outer Dependency Syndrome. A dangerous
condition that develops in those who have
been Real Digitalized for too long.
After causing headaches, dizziness, and
coma, finally it breaks down the mind.
think this'd be a good way of making it all fit cleanlyhttps://i.imgur.com/YFOr7gD.jpg
- everythings fine aside from the pointless first line "Terminal Disc".https://i.imgur.com/OdWtssh.jpg
An informant with a monkey-like beast PC.
His fees are somewhat high, but he uses
these funds as Gord's errand-runner.
However, this does not mean obeying
against his will. Rather he did it of his
own free will.
gotta say that last sentence doesn't make alot of sense to me but it fits now in any casehttps://i.imgur.com/8D2WfJe.jpg
[.hack Works 17]
.hack//G.U. Returner (Anime)
An OVA that is included on the DVD of the
.hack//G.U. (Game) Rebirth Special
Edition. A story that takes place after
the games. Haseo, Shino and others
the first sentence is kinda inaccurate since Returner came way after Rebirth not with ithttps://i.imgur.com/BL2RyJ5.jpg
- I'd cut out that redundant "Ayaka Amaki." part but thats just mehttps://i.imgur.com/t2lJ5N8.jpg
- I dun get why theres 2 entries for the same thing but zombies?? also, could prolly cut the "Three" part cause it doesn't add anything an causes outta bounds to happenhttps://i.imgur.com/wHrzMiq.jpg
- could prolly drop "Aura" from the entry name. I think by this point we get its refering to her anywayshttps://i.imgur.com/UsXUsBY.jpg
- got another of those redundant first lines in therehttps://i.imgur.com/eEQfuXh.jpg
A name for a special space that
exists outside of the specifications of
bumped down the last bit just ta make it cleanly fit. also dumped the "Data space." parthttps://i.imgur.com/XXNfy5X.jpg
A closed-beta net game started in 2014
that lasted for 3 months. It was invented
by Jyotaro Amagi in order to test
Real Digitalization. Through this
experiment, Jyotaro succeeded in
Real Digitalizing the then 8-year-old
Tokio for a few seconds.
added a couple extra words to line 3 and got all the rest fitting inhttps://i.imgur.com/hvRCNhf.jpg
CC Corp's second president. He is the
owner of Schicksal and gives orders
through a monitor. Although he seems
rather arrogant and calls himself a
genius, he shows respect and humility
to those who are competent.
no outta bounds now!https://i.imgur.com/S8BkZmn.jpg
Belongs to CC Corp's 2nd Security Admin.
Dept. Due to a fire at CC Corp in 2015,
the temporarily stopped RA Plan was
resumed with the plan of reproducing
the Ultimate AI.
I made this all fit but I think it needs a rewrite? sure the RA Plan was stopped in 2015, but this makes it sound like thats when it was resumed, when actually Kazumi resumed it in 2017
I know these are super low priority so instead of posting tons of pics I'm just gonna note ones I feel should have a look over should anyone feel like delving back into 'em to fix 'em up. These include things like random japanese characters, typos/grammar issues, and lines coming from one character that feel like they should have been coming from another. Basically these can be either a little hard to follow or nearly incomprehensible.
- Grunty's Room
Tsukasa & Bear [Counsel]
Tsukasa, Mimiru & Subaru [Support]
Tsukasa, Mimiru & Bear [Appearance and Substance]
Shugo & Hotaru [Not Enough]
Shugo, Rena & Hotaru [The Secret to Popularity]
- Crimson Knights @HOME
Mimiru & Subaru [FRIENDS]
Tsukasa & Silver Knight [Bounds of the Heart]
Silver Knight & Crim [The Way of the Knights]
Subaru & BT [A Woman's Pride]
Subaru & Bear [There Is No Love Like A Parent's]
- Net Slum
Kite & Blackrose [I Want a Nickname!]
Kite & Mistral [A Housewife's Pleading]
Kite & Orca [Real Final Boss]
Kite & Balmung [Secret of the Birth]
Kite & Helba [The Strongest Combo Formation?]
Kite & Elk [Incorrect Knowledge]
Kite & Mia [Cat Toy?]
Kite & Terajima Ryoko [A Lady's Request]
Kite & Sanjuro [New Hero]
Kite & Rachel [A Hero's Intuition]
Kite & Marlo [Right of Self-defense]
Balmung & Wiseman [The Old Belief is the Sa (??)]
Kite, Blackrose & Balmung [A Brave Player]
Kite, Blackrose & Orca [A Meeting of Stars]
Kite, Blackrose & Terajima Ryoko [Fickle Hearts]
Helba, Wiseman & Lios [Cornered]
Kite, Blackrose, Orca & Balmung [Two Nicknames]
Helba & Cubia [The Servant's House]
- Among Thorns
Kite & Tri-Edge [Telepathy] ****
Midori & Tri-Edge [Lending and Borrowing] ****
Haseo & Tri-Edge [Companion of Fate]
Phyllo & Tri-Edge [Former Marauder]
Azure Balmung & Azure Orca [Indecipherable] (broken, after Azure Balmung's first line)
- Twilight Brigade's @HOME
Haseo & Shino [No Match]
Haseo & Tabby [A Convenient Man]
Haseo & Midori [Provocation and Defiance]
Haseo & Phyllo [A Slow Time]
Atoli & Shino [Black and White]
Shino & Phyllo [The Place I Want To Be]
Phyllo & Sakisaka [Two Eloquent People]
Tabby, Phyllo & Sakisaka [After the Affair]
Haseo, Shino & Tabby [In Contrast to Words]
Haseo, Tabby & Phyllo [A Soft-spoken Man]
Haseo, Sakisaka & Ender [Critical Situation]
Haseo & Ovan [Returner]
Ovan & Phyllo [A Red Gift]
Ovan & Bset [A Shrewd Woman]
Ovan & Gord [Rematch]
- Canard's @HOME
Silabus & Atoli [The Person Behind the Rumors]
Silabus & Gaspard [Rumors and Truth]
Kuhn & Atoli [Because He's Popular]
Kuhn & Gaspard [Tears of Joy
Haseo & Atoli [Like Spring Lambs]
Haseo & Bo [Presents Were a Huge Success]
Haseo & Pi [Cheeky Kid]
Haseo & Kuhn [High-pressure Salesmanship]
Haseo & Gaspard [Winner's Privileges]
Haseo, Silabus & Gaspard [Established Reputation]
Haseo, Silabus & Bo [A Past That Won't Die?]
Haseo & Endrance [Popular Nuisance]
- Moon Tree's @HOME
Pi & Zelkova [Charging Up the Mood]
Haseo & Sakaki [Water and Oil]
Haseo & Kaede [The One Who Always Needs Help]
Haseo & Hiiragi [The Flames of Jealousy]
Zelkova & Hiiragi [I'm Not Interested!]
Matsu & Hiiragi [A Lady's Boundaries]
Matsu & Sophora [The State of Management?]
Hiiragi & Sophora [Beautiful Investigator]
Sakaki, Zelkova & Kaede [Erroneous Result]
Zelkova, Matsu & Hiiragi [Title Mania]
Sakaki & Kazubolo [Contrarian]
- Kestrel's @HOME
Kuhn & Gabi [Epicureanセ@]
Ovan & Gabi [Sworn Brother]
Nanase & Gabi [How Everyone Passes]
Gabi & Bordeaux [Fleeting Beauty]
Negimaru & Grein [Unusual]
Kuhn, Gabi & Bordeaux [If You Become Leader]
Gabi, Bordeaux & Grein [A Mundane Man]
Bordeaux, Negimaru & Grein [Negimaru's Misunderstanding]
Gabi, Bordeaux, Negimaru & Grein [Who's the Deputy?]
- Icolo's @HOME
Haseo & Antares [Surpass Your Master!!]
Alkaid & Taihaku [A Popular Person's Mission]
Haseo, Alkaid & Antares [Proper Palace Conditions]
Haseo, Alkaid & Sirius [Why You Chose It]
Haseo, Phyllo & Antares [If You Open the Lid]
Alkaid, Taihaku & Sirius [Emporer Throne's Glory]
Alkaid, Antares, Taihaku & Sirius [Achieve!]
Endrance & Taihaku [Careful Preparation]
Endrance & Sirius [Reason for Declining]
Endrance, Alkaid, Taihaku & Sirius [Cause of Defeat]
- Aina's Room
Shino & Ovan [A World For Two]
Haseo & Haseo B-st [Self-Council]
Ovan & Haseo B-st [How to Train Beasts]
Ovan & Tri-Edge [Scapegoat]
Ovan & Azure Balmung [The Reason for Leeway]
Ovan & Azure Orca [For You]
Cubia, Ovan, Tri-Edge & Flugel [A Gathering of Worthy Opponents] ****
- NORMAL Room
Balmung & Sanjuro [A Lovable Performance]
Balmung & Seig [End of a Legend]
Blackrose & Kazu [Apprentice Becomes Master]
Blackrose & Chimney [An Unusual Hobby]
Carl, Alph & Seig [The Heart of a Rumor]
Orca & Balmung [I Don't Want to Imagine]
Balmung & Ouka [A Fight in Common!]
Balmung & Shugo [Aiming to Overthrow the Master!]
Shugo & Rena [Ideals and Reality]
Shugo & Mireille [2nd-Gen Hunter]
Shugo & Komiyan III [Bad Influence = New Friend]
Balmung & Rena [The Truth Behind Reality]
Sanjuro & Rena [A Sister's Concern]
Rena & Komiyan III [Law & Order]
Shugo, Rena & Ouka [Puberty]
Shugo, Rena & Komiyan III [A Troublesome Combo]
Albireo & Balmung [A Private Talk]
Albireo & Orca [A Partner Your Can Trust]
Midori & Adamas [Fateful Transaction]
Haseo & Ender [Paying It Back Twofold]
Naobi & Ender [Next Target]
Tabby & Seisaku (h) [Impact is Important]
Seisaku (h) & Hideyo (h) [You Won't Serve Me!]
Tabby & Cashmere [Nothing Venture, Nothing Gained セ@]
Wool & Cashmere [Cocky Little Brother]
Silabus & Midori [Under Such A Star]
Kuhn & Cashmere [Beginner Course + α]
Haseo, Pi, Kuhn & Yata [Uncertain About the Future?]
Midori & Gaspard [Awakened Beast]
Pi & Gord [I Want to Fight Someone Strong]
Phyllo & Gord [Dreams and Reality]
Kite & Shugo [The Difference Between Two People]
Pi & Saburou [It's Not Your Concern]
Haseo & Saburou [A Bystander]
Endrance & Alkaid [Hope For Revenge!]
Tohto & Saburou [A Fresh Start]
Tabby, Seisaku (b) & Hideyo (b) [Soothing Colors]
Haseo, Saku & Endrance [Fate's Outcome]
- Schicksal's @HOME
Tabby & Klarinette [The Big Serving the Small?)
Pi & Klarinette [I Won't Lose Next Time!]
Saku & Klarinette [That Doesn't Scare Me]
Flugel, Cello & Klarinette [The Lazy Leader's Assertion]
Sakaki & Flugel [Changing Sales Tactics]
- Saika's Room
Mimiru & Blackrose [Little Difference]
Blackrose & Mistral [By Appointment Only]
Mistral & Mireille [Similar Parents and Kids]
Blackrose, Mistral & Natsume [The Secret to Love]
Blackrose & Rena [Shuffle?]
Rena & Mireille [Girls Are Pragmatic]
Rena & Ouka [Relationship With Master]
Pi & Atoli [The Enemy Appears]
Atoli & Alkaid [A Straightforward Approach]
**** = these cannot be viewed at all, as they force the psp to shutdown crash-toli style >_<
- %sMB of free space? the install size is 860mb so thats prolly what it should say.https://i.imgur.com/qP1oTml.jpg
- the server symbols are mixed up nowhttps://i.imgur.com/g96FhGI.jpg
- this tutorial text should be updated to change "Magic" to "Magician's" (or the reverse should happen)https://i.imgur.com/8hkrLHv.jpg
- "1 Time 3 Minute"? "16 Body"??https://i.imgur.com/5bAFGxK.jpg
- this should be "Relic" not "Ruined"https://i.imgur.com/IsVV9cQ.jpg
- I believe this should say "Chrono Chip" instead of Coreshttps://i.imgur.com/rvtjPxo.jpg
- neat! noticed these got shortened! most fit pretty nicely now although I guess there are some odd ones outta bounds yet.https://i.imgur.com/nHy2JI6.jpg
- speaking of outta boundshttps://i.imgur.com/hLCkYHe.jpg
- now it should stop?https://i.imgur.com/8O4xJEY.jpg
- should be "Celestial" not "Azure"https://i.imgur.com/AcFmupU.jpg
- we're trying to select a knight not an erahttps://i.imgur.com/NwieRK5.jpg
- not that it matters much but is it supposed to be simply "Pun Enthusiast' or "Bad Pun Enthusiast"?https://i.imgur.com/n8BSjKZ.jpg
- maybe cut this skills name short to just "Biting Fang" or abbreviate the latter chunk to "ASC"?https://i.imgur.com/G7HB8CK.jpg
- theres no space between Title & Obtained here either!https://i.imgur.com/HWRljUH.jpg
- quite the overflowing skill name!https://i.imgur.com/IME3g0C.jpg
- should be "Warring" not "Battle". ya even actually have it as "Warring" in the database entry so~https://i.imgur.com/w8C0KuL.jpg
- suggest renaming these to Beginner's Text, Intermediate Text, and Master's Text so they fit and tie-in with what they were called in the G.U. games localizationhttps://i.imgur.com/7etOsK4.jpg
- got a stray katakana and @ herehttps://i.imgur.com/e5K4AGW.jpg
- should "The start town" be "The starting town" ?https://i.imgur.com/oHvfyQ5.jpg
- セ@ shows up againhttps://i.imgur.com/FrjaVdW.jpg
- looks like this abilities description got cut off!https://i.imgur.com/bssAEGb.jpg
- out the what?https://i.imgur.com/aYYbgGy.jpg
- Tin Plate Mainspring/Fernhttps://i.imgur.com/YqMWGB1.jpg
- this doesn't come across very clearlyhttps://i.imgur.com/PNy7CWV.jpg
- in the Database, Twilight Brigade is abbreviated as "Twi. Brigade" doing the same here may make it fit betterhttps://i.imgur.com/TF5DtPn.jpg
- couple of things running outta space herehttps://i.imgur.com/7D7d9dX.jpg
- セ@ strikes the f-skit menu for a third time!https://i.imgur.com/ELnPtqP.jpg
- this sounds kinda rigid. hows about "Here, you can use Virus Cores to copy and activate 1 UPC ability to Tokio."https://i.imgur.com/IlFTIGW.jpg
- could there be anyway to abbreviate the beasts name o.o?