Haiku (100th post)

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Tack
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Haiku (100th post)

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This is my 100th post, and so here's an attempt at a .hack haku. :)

.hack is special
It let me find some new friends
Hope it lasts forever
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That was a pretty impressive failure. For starters are not haikus supposed to have five syllables in the first line, seven in the second and five in the third?
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It was a good attempt Tack, however, Haikus follow a 5-7-5 syllable pattern, and are suppose to describe nature or a natural event.
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They can describe whatever, but that extra syllable is a problem. Then again, you only live twice....
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_Tri-edge_ wrote:...Haikus follow a 5-7-5 syllable pattern...
Way to totally ignore what I said and then say the exact same thing -.-

Hmmm.... Perhaps:

Dot hack is special,
It let me find new friends.
Pity it won't last.

I changed the last one because of the syllable, the fact that it did not make sense without an 'I' at the start and on this site's front page i read somethin' bout how CyberConnect2 is going to cease workin' on .Hack stuff :(
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@Admilu, You stated it as a question. :D
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_Tri-edge_ wrote:@Admilu, You stated it as a question. :D
A rhetorical question -_-, but i can understand.
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Re: Haiku (100th post)

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A correctly done haiku or not, it's the thought that counts in a situation like this. Good job Tack. But yeah, maybe rewrite the last line to, Hope it never ends. Tragically though, it must end before another .hack//Dusk incident happens.
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Re: Haiku (100th post)

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I turn on .hack
Holy mother of Aura
One sixty hours
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