Share ideas and critics? Anyone?
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I'm quite in a need of help. In my class, we have a task to do before December. We're going to make comics. ;D
So, I've made up a story. As well as characters. Though I still have a great deal of work to do with them.
Okay, so this is the background story. The main character, Butler, who happens to be a butler in a wealthy noble family. He has to take care of the family's son, since both of the parents are out of the country. Though it's not a task he looks forward to do, since the son (whom I think shall be named Patrick) is basically a brat. He looks down upon Butler, and find him annoying, so he tries to make Butler's life as hellish as possible.
Now you throught that would be the story, but it isn't. One day, Patrick is kidnapped by... KIDNAPPERS. And since no one is around to help Butler, he has to choose either if he's going to pay the price for Patrick's life- or save him himself.
This is Butler. He's supposed to be boring, so I made him old and is a bit slow to react. The sketch was made in oekaki, and I'm very inexperienced with oekaki- so he didn't become that great. :/ Though I still like his pose. You think I should change him in any way?
So, I've made up a story. As well as characters. Though I still have a great deal of work to do with them.
Okay, so this is the background story. The main character, Butler, who happens to be a butler in a wealthy noble family. He has to take care of the family's son, since both of the parents are out of the country. Though it's not a task he looks forward to do, since the son (whom I think shall be named Patrick) is basically a brat. He looks down upon Butler, and find him annoying, so he tries to make Butler's life as hellish as possible.
Now you throught that would be the story, but it isn't. One day, Patrick is kidnapped by... KIDNAPPERS. And since no one is around to help Butler, he has to choose either if he's going to pay the price for Patrick's life- or save him himself.
This is Butler. He's supposed to be boring, so I made him old and is a bit slow to react. The sketch was made in oekaki, and I'm very inexperienced with oekaki- so he didn't become that great. :/ Though I still like his pose. You think I should change him in any way?
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Now the villains, aka the KIDNAPPERS.
They are a group of two weirdos, basically. The one who actually does the kidnapping is this guy. He is half bad/half good, since he thinks everything his mum tells him to do is right. I'm still unsure regarding the colours on his clothes. But that is a minor thing to think about; since the comic is gonna be ink'd.
And I don't know what name he should have yet. I would appreciate any suggestions.
They are a group of two weirdos, basically. The one who actually does the kidnapping is this guy. He is half bad/half good, since he thinks everything his mum tells him to do is right. I'm still unsure regarding the colours on his clothes. But that is a minor thing to think about; since the comic is gonna be ink'd.
And I don't know what name he should have yet. I would appreciate any suggestions.
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And now finally, the brain behind the kidnapping. The body-builders mother.
Her reasons for kidnapping Patrick is because of something which happened between her and Patricks father. I think he broke her heart or something like that This character is almost finished, I guess. But I still appreciate critics ;D
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You guys suck, not replying to this thread... SHAME ON YOU! D:
The pictures look awesome and funny Klis, as I've said before. xD A suggestion for the kidnapper-guy's name is... Rasmus? XDDD
The pictures look awesome and funny Klis, as I've said before. xD A suggestion for the kidnapper-guy's name is... Rasmus? XDDD
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OH GOD, Rasmus?! X'D Why Rasmus of all names? XD
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BECAUSE IT'S HILARIOUS. XDKlister wrote:OH GOD, Rasmus?! X'D Why Rasmus of all names? XD
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Yay Klis~~ <3 *Tackle glomp~* XDD
It doesn't look like you're inexperienced with Oekakis, actually. o: The sketchiness looks cute~ XDD And so does the soft colouring. X33 HYPER CUTENESS~ X333
Interesting story so far! o: A few more (probably minor) characters and it'll be great~ XD (The world needs minor characters to look good in the background~ 8D; )
Names... Names... ummm... no I can't think of any, I'm afraid. XD;;
Good luck~ 83
It doesn't look like you're inexperienced with Oekakis, actually. o: The sketchiness looks cute~ XDD And so does the soft colouring. X33 HYPER CUTENESS~ X333
Interesting story so far! o: A few more (probably minor) characters and it'll be great~ XD (The world needs minor characters to look good in the background~ 8D; )
Names... Names... ummm... no I can't think of any, I'm afraid. XD;;
Good luck~ 83
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(laughs) Well, if that's what you think... xDMellow Grunty wrote:BECAUSE IT'S HILARIOUS. XD
Thank you so much Luna! *glomps back* Minor characters you say? Hmmm... I'll think upon that since I still got lots of time.Lunaros wrote:Yay Klis~~ <3 *Tackle glomp~* XDD
It doesn't look like you're inexperienced with Oekakis, actually. o: The sketchiness looks cute~ XDD And so does the soft colouring. X33 HYPER CUTENESS~ X333
Interesting story so far! o: A few more (probably minor) characters and it'll be great~ XD (The world needs minor characters to look good in the background~ 8D; )
Names... Names... ummm... no I can't think of any, I'm afraid. XD;;
Good luck~ 83
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I only have one sugestion (it might not even really matter to you) but i think changing the main characters name from Butler to somthing elts. Having that name just reminds me to much of the Artemis Fowle novles. You dont have to take this to heart, its just a concideration
As for a name for the woman kidnapper, somthing out of the ordinary would fit. A fiew suggestions...
Abriana
Ambra
Andriana
Desiree
Kayla
Meeghan
Paige
If you like any of these you can take them
As for a name for the woman kidnapper, somthing out of the ordinary would fit. A fiew suggestions...
Abriana
Ambra
Andriana
Desiree
Kayla
Meeghan
Paige
If you like any of these you can take them
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Actually I think she's already chosen "Afrodite" as the name for the body-builder's mom, at least she told me that a week ago or so.The Key of Dawn wrote:As for a name for the woman kidnapper, somthing out of the ordinary would fit. A fiew suggestions...
GET IT? AFRO? AFRODITE? HURR HURR.
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Hahaha thats a good one. So go ahead and dissregard my name suggestions
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Oh, I see. I've read the novel as well, but I didn't think about it first. Thanks for reminding me!The Key of Dawn wrote:I only have one sugestion (it might not even really matter to you) but i think changing the main characters name from Butler to somthing elts. Having that name just reminds me to much of the Artemis Fowle novles. You dont have to take this to heart, its just a concideration
I had thought of giving Butler the name 'Sebastian', but I'm still not entirely sure.
Thank you guys for your comments and ideas! I really appreciate it, and I have taken them into consideration.